Monster Description Repost

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(Sorry about the first one, that was a mistake)

Hi all! I was hoping I could get your opinion on the description of a monster in a ya novel I am writing.
Here is the description:
He thought at first that it was another villager. But no human was that deformed.
Its back was grotesquely hunched, forcing it into a stoop. Its spine was knotted and ridged. Its legs were bowed, heels spurred. Under the light, the skin appeared to have a green undertone.
Realizing someone had seen it, the beast turned with a vicious snarl. The top of its head was completely flat, and its brow jutted far out. Yellow, reptilian eyes gleamed out of the shadowed face. The mouth and nose protruded with the faint beginnings of a snout.

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dang thats really descriptive! it sounds so cool and creepy lol

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Woah :exploding_head:!! I got chills!! That is a great description!!! I can really imagine what it would look like :cold_sweat:. Great job! And gl with your story! :white_heart::heart_hands:

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Thank youl :heart:

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Thank you! That’s what I was going for.

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Woahhhh, it’s so creepy and descriptive! Good luck with your story!!

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Thank you! :smiley:

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super awesome! could really visualize it :O

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damn! (i mean this in a positive light, if i found this irl i would simply cease to exist so i say thats an amazing description)

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Thank you, I take that in the best way! :heart:

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Thank you all so much for being so awesome and taking the time to read this, and thank you for all your kind words! Y’all are the best! :heart:

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This sounds amazing? Im already hooked please let us all know when its published

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Aw, thanks! Truth be told, I probably never will, bc I’ve got so many half baked/ unfinished stories and books, but hopefully one day I will get them all done! :heart:

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Wow, that gave me chills, that i amazing, i didn’t know you were writing a novel(i need to read it when u finish)

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Thank you! Yeah, I write a lot, although most things never get finished. Believe it or not, the story above actually has dragons in it, too!

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U should share them with me, i would definitely read them

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that is super good! better then me lol

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Same id love to read this. Incredible description!

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