Hey y’all I’m writing my first book and I need some opinions please read this and tell me what you think and if you would read it past the first chapter and this is the first draft with barely any editing and so yeah hope you enjoy 
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I’m sorry, my OCD… 
Please please please capitalize your i’s 
It looks good otherwise! 
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Sorry it’s hard for me to remember to capitalize my i’s
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And the first letter after a period. Pls. Otherwise it’s pretty good! Maybe add a couple of more descriptions of the emotions or what they sense. And slide in some figurative language!
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there’s a few verb tense errors and punctuation errors, but other than that it looks good!
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love ittt
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It’s good, but needs to be proofread. I wouldn’t mind doing that for you if you let me:)
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